Andrea Dale’s short story Devouring Heart, published 2011, is very short (just over 2000 words, I think) but well-written with only one moment of grammatical strangeness and one typo. The author has a nice way with words, for example:
I soared and swam in a sea of scarlet desire.
The first half of the story describes the time when Case first met Sorcha. The second half is two years later, and is dominated by a graphic description of the two women having sex, that is sexually explicit without really being erotic.
This story appeared originally in the anthology The Sweetest Kiss, published 2009, which was reviewed by Jean Roberta for Erotica Revealed (see here):
In this heartbreaking tale, the good intentions of both vampire and mortal can’t make up for the communication gap between them. This relationship makes a valid-enough metaphor for real-life relationships in an incestuous lesbian community, and the story seems true to its literary roots.
There simply isn’t enough detail in the story to draw these conclusions. For all we know, the women were perfectly happy and communicating healthily at the point where Sorcha grabbed the chance to be a vampire and promptly disappeared. It would be nice to know something of what did happen during those two years – maybe then the story really would be ‘heartbreaking’ (this word from the review is quoted on the cover).
(Speaking of the cover, it has that great picture of a vampire girl that I’ve seen used now five times – most memorably on Thomas Emson’s Krimson. I think that cover was done by Anna Torborg of Snowbooks, but is it based on a stock photo image?)
I’m giving it two stars because I enjoyed the writing, but it’s a generous two stars. This is a very short story that just feels like a wasted opportunity.